#1
I need to formulate it into a song though. Here's a basic rough draft.


Please leave some commentary and/or feedback on how to improve it and what I need to add to make it sound better.


There's a little solo at the end too. Tell me what you think of that as well.


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZoOeL21Al_Q#


Thanks!


C4C, btw
Last edited by g°®† at Aug 9, 2008,
#2
cant stop looking at your icon to watch the vid haha
naw its pretty nice riff
#4
nice, it had enough changes to keep it from getting too repetitive. and i liked your tone. both the riff and your tone had a very buckethead feel so it. which is always good.

i got a new track on my profile, im kinda unsure about it, so any return comments you have are appreciated.
#5
i like it dude. it seems a bit repetitive, but the riff is cool so it's not annoying. the solo at the end is tight as well, good job.

and holy ****, you're good at bowling. O_O
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#7
It sounded pretty good. Little repetitive but with some vocals over it I think i would be a perfectly fine metal song. Also nice solo at the end. If you ever get it posted on ur profile with a little more to it PM and I'll check it out.
#8
Man, that tone was sick! What kind of setup are you running through?
I dugg the riff too, now you've just got to integrate it into a song that has some direction to it. Maybe mix things up a bit so there is less repetition, or change the tone so it builds and fades. With some good vocals that could be an awesome song.

Want to check out "Can You Save Me"
http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/Jack+Carver/
thanks!
#9
Quote by Jack Carver
Man, that tone was sick! What kind of setup are you running through?
I dugg the riff too, now you've just got to integrate it into a song that has some direction to it. Maybe mix things up a bit so there is less repetition, or change the tone so it builds and fades. With some good vocals that could be an awesome song.

Want to check out "Can You Save Me"
http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/Jack+Carver/
thanks!



lol ... my tone is derived completely from this....

http://namm.harmony-central.com/WNAMM02/Content/Korg/PR/PX4.html