#1
Hey guys hope you enjoy this song i made this when i was swaping states and i wrote this on the plain whilst going up state, i wrote from my Mums Dad point of veiw as he waved to us when we drove off to the airport. C4C


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Verse: Am F C, Am G F, Am G C G, Am C G F,
Chorus: C G Am, C G F,

Saying our Last Goodbye


If this is our last goodbye
Let me cry, by your side
Just for a little while, i never wanted to let go
you have grown up so fast in the long time

If this just may be
Our swan song
Let me sing, aloud to you
Just for a little while
We are saying our last goobye

I know you have to leave
But it doesn’t make it easy for me
Tell me what to do
I’d do it for you
Stay here, one more day
I can't let you go away

If this is our last goodbye
Then let us sing our swan song
Just for a little while
You have grown up so fast in the long time
this is our last goodbye
sure did the time fly by
Oh honey i will miss you

This isn't our last goodbye
i'm singing our swan song
Just for a little while
i wave as you leave, i stand in the driving way
i sing out our swan song
this is not our last goodbye
Last edited by Kom23 at Feb 10, 2009,
#2
That sounds god man, i was almost reading it as though it had a melody. Theres no key chorus which i do like in a set of lyrics, but its hard to tell without some music.

Hope that helps bro, sounds great
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#3
Quote by Kom23

If this is our last goodbye
Let me cry, by your side
Three rhymes in two lines. Ambitious, but I like it.
Just for a little while, i never wanted to let go
you have grown so much, just in this little time.

If this just may be
Our swan song
Let me sing, aloud to you
Just for a little while
I would get rid of the word 'just' here, seeing as you used it a couple lines ago.
We are saying our last goodbyes
This line is weak, "last goodbyes" is a bit of a cliche.

I know you have to leave
But it doesn’t make it easy for me
Oh tell me what to do
And I’d do it for you
Just stay, here
Only one more day
I don't, i can't let you go away
I can tell that this section is very sincere and honest, but lyrically, there isn't much that stands out from it.

If this is our last goodbye
Then let us sing our swan song
Just for a little while
You have grown up so fast in the long time
this is our last goodbye
sure did the time fly by
Oh honey i will miss you

I remember when you were an infant
when you grew older, i was to over protective
This line is way too long (or it seems so to me)
and everytime i saw you everyday
you were my baby girl through my eyes
My Last goodbye...

This our last goodbye
i'm singing our swan song
as i wave as you leave, as i stand in the driving way
also seems too long to me.
i sing out our swan song
this is not our last goodbye
i will see you in the long run.
very weak last line... doesn't really mean anything and has no powerful, emotional strike at the end.


Overall, this was a good piece, it could be edited in a few places to make it stand out a bit more, but solid nonetheless. Crit "soda pop" in my sig, if you can.