#1
my new song, and i haven't completed the chorus. Tell me how it is so far and maybe add a line. Here it is:


You walk with such arrogance
and talk bout how great you are
you dance with no confidence
yet you really are quite bizarre
you smell highly of cheap beer
smell strongly of smoke
you dress like a queer
and i really hope you choke

You swagger in the limelight
and love to absorb it all
yet you can't win the simplest fight
and you hit the ground and fall
Myspace.

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#2
Harsh...

But they're 'nice' (it feels awkward to say that with the kind of feeling I'm recieving.) The only thing I can really suggest is changing one of the 'smell's with a word like 'reek' or 'stink,' to add variety. I'm not personally one for the lyrical queer-bashing, either, but it's your song.

Swagger... like the title.