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Rate the lyrics...If i posted this wrong plz just tell me and ill remove it..here
"With the hammer the judge must toll,
Left me in prison, no parole"

"Hard living in the slammer, not a friendly soul
living, confined space, escape is goal"

"The Police, the justice, they dont understand
From life as a citizen, iv'e been banned"

"Just had to be the quilty, the judges hammer struck
no alternatives, just my luck!"

"You wont get out, no freedom here,
no one smiles, just sweat and fear"

"No fresh air here, im behind bars,
cant see the sky, no shining stars"

"Think hard 'bout what they said,
Pay back now (or "you payed them back"),Blood stained bed"

"Make they pay for what they did,
Stop stalling,now,KILL THE KID!"

"The cops dont believe me, they dont see my point of view,
God, if i get out, its them ill sue"

"They dont understand, he Threatened me!
I keep explaining, they just cant see!"
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MichaelEMJAYARE
#2
Not a full crit by any means, but:
Quote by Metallica Meat

"Hard living in the slammer, not a friendly soul
living, confined space, escape is goal"
"escape is goal" might break the speaking style of the piece, I'd say "escape, my goal" instead

"Just had to be the quilty, the judges hammer struck
no alternatives, just my luck!"
I'd replace "judges hammer" with "gavel", so as not to break the flow (2 syllables too many)

"The cops dont believe me, they dont see my point of view,
God, if i get out, its them ill sue"
"they don't see my point of view" is too long and breaks the flow, I'd substitute something like "see what I do" or "my point of view." It's okay to assume the listener will still understand if you leave out words that are implied
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That's all I've got; the rest seemed good to me. I'm sure more people will come in with more complete ratings, but hey, it's 12:30AM and I'm lazy.