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This was the first thing i ever wrote and it was written about 3 years ago. For the longest time ic ouldnt find it but after searching every crevice of my room it showed up.

Water cascades through the night
Intruder carries through the doors
He wants less but wants no more
Has found his victim in the shadows
She resist until she cant no more
He’s found his treasure and his pleasure
He is now a man in his eyes
She wakes up and finds something missing inside
But it’s there, growing, moaning, pulsating through her body
She wants nothing to do with this disease
After all it’s not hers to please
She goes to society and begs for freedom
They say no that’s not allowed in God's kingdom
The pleasure for him now has a treasure within
She cries and cries until 2 people are dead inside.


so yah dudes, its obviously about rape and abortion. I was heavy into jim morrison during this period.
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This was the first thing i ever wrote and it was written about 3 years ago. For the longest time ic ouldnt find it but after searching every crevice of my room it showed up.

Water cascades through the night
Intruder carries through the doors
"carries onward" would make more sense, at least to me.
He wants less but wants no more
I don't get this line...
Has found his victim in the shadows
He's instead of has, imp
She resist until she cant no more
He’s found his treasure and his pleasure
He is now a man in his eyes
You should change to 'in his own'.
She wakes up and finds something missing inside
But it’s there, growing, moaning, pulsating through her body
She wants nothing to do with this disease
After all it’s not hers to please
She goes to society and begs for freedom
They say no that’s not allowed in God's kingdom
The pleasure for him now has a treasure within
She cries and cries until 2 people are dead inside.


This wasn't a bad piece, but there was some confusion for me like I told you in IRC.
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