#1
This is one of my bands songs. These are the lyrics.
Its about leading people on.


Verse 1
Careful soul. You're dramatic
Don't reclaim and regret it
With standards high you walk into
Safer grounds await you

Chorus
As you carry on know there's something more
That lies in beyond if you just search for
Father guide them to their salvation
Father guide them away from deed done

Verse 2
Careful soul you're not through yet
Don't come forth and forget it
With endings only left ahead
Still too blind to understand

Chorus
As you carry on know there's something more
That lies in beyond if you just search for
Father guide them to their salvation
Father guide them away from deed done

Chorus
[Soft]
As you carry on know there's something more
That lies in beyond if you just search for
[Loud]
I confess to it all I am sinful on
My body mind and soul has all led them wrong
Father save me from what I have done
Father save me from what I've become

Outro
Careful soul the body's wrong
Acting on the urges to come
#3
Hmm, it would help to know what genre this is.
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#5
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This is one of my bands songs. These are the lyrics.
Its about leading people on.


Verse 1
Careful soul. You're dramatic
Don't reclaim and regret it
With standards high you walk into
Safer grounds await you

Its a little murky, I cant quite tell if its a warning, or careful soul is actually referring to a person. Obviously you cant just reveal the point of the song right off the bat, but I think it might actually be a little too ambiguous.

Chorus
As you carry on know there's something more
That lies in beyond if you just search for
Father guide them to their salvation
Father guide them away from deed done

Im not sure I like the ending's here, they feel really unfinished. If you just search for what? Whats the deed? Hopefully the next verse'll clear it up, and in that case, cool cool then.

Verse 2
Careful soul you're not through yet
Don't come forth and forget it
With endings only left ahead
Still too blind to understand

These feel like you may have written them seperately, then put them together, which is often times a valid writing style for some, but in this case they dont really seem to make sense. Your going to keep going, but then not? Come forth and forget what? I still dont really know what we're talking about. I do like the 2 lines, those flow well, and make sense.

Chorus
As you carry on know there's something more
That lies in beyond if you just search for
Father guide them to their salvation
Father guide them away from deed done

Chorus
[Soft]
As you carry on know there's something more
That lies in beyond if you just search for
[Loud]
I confess to it all I am sinful on
My body mind and soul has all led them wrong
Father save me from what I have done
Father save me from what I've become

What are you sinful on? Body mind and soul?
Repetition in the last two lines is fairly common, but I think it works pretty well in this circumstance.

Outro
Careful soul the body's wrong
Acting on the urges to come



I cant help but laugh at the last bit, because it sounds overtly sexual. Immature yes, but I'd consider a different word, Come is the culprit for the former offense, and its also a pretty common word.


All in all I think it has a lot of promise, but it seems pretty vague at times, so if that was what you were shooting for, you nailed it, but if not, I'd consider specifying a bit more, so I can get more involved in the scenario.


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#6
Personally I love this, I really enjoy religious lyrics that help others with their walk with God, and ways to minister to people through music, I think that this a really nice song.

overall i'd say 9/10 IMO

Great job