This is my new song that i've written and performed myself with the help of a drum machine. It's on my profile and it's called Sorry. You could also listen to my guitar solo, but that's not as important to me as the song is. Please listen and comment on what i can do better. Thanks
Last edited by Yevrag35 at Aug 14, 2008,
Lyrics don't flow rythym wise in all parts of the song especially the begining.(time:15-18)
I also dont really care for the reverb/delay.
The vocals seem off pitch at some points and are really the weak part of the song throughout.
Honestly this could be ok if you worked on the vocals a little bit to get them up to scratch and added some other parts to fill out your sonic space. There is alot of dead empty room and it could be filled to make the song sound more "full."

Give it some work and you have something to run with.