#1
I wrote these lyrics in one go on a random evening, but I feel something is missing. I just can't put my finger on it. Anyways, I thought I'd post it here and let you guys comment on it.

So, comment away.


Haunting Me


Verse
It's been several years since I first met you
And fell madly in love with you
I was just some young kid
You were just you
Back then I was nothing more than a kid

Pre-Chorus
How was I supposed to know
You would haunt me forever

Chorus
Everywhere I looked I saw your eyes
Staring back at me
Every time I dreamt I felt your touch
Hurting my soul forever
You were always there in the back of my mind

Verse
I told you I was in love with you
Wrapped it up in fancy words
Shame I did, I shouldn't have done it
Back then I was nothing more than a fool

Pre-Chorus
How was I supposed to know
You would haunt me forever

Chorus
Everywhere I looked I saw your eyes
Staring back at me
Every time I dreamt I felt your touch
Hurting my soul forever
You were always there in the back of my mind

Outro
To this day you haunt my thoughts
I can't explain it, even if I tried
But I just know every single time
You'll haunt me forever
#2
It has a bit of an A7x feel to it, not majorly. But I could imagine them writing lyrics like this.

What were you intending the music to be like with it?
Acousticy? Heavy? That would help alot if we knew that.
I deeply regret the 6661 in my username. Siiiigh. Damn you, 14 year old me, you edgy little bastard.
#3
Well, in between acoustic and heavy actually. The verses would be a slow and acoustic bit while the pre-chorus is a bit heavier and the chorus itself something heavy with distorted/overdriven guitars.
#4
That does sound a bit like a couple of Avenged' songs actually...

Clairvoyant Diesease,
I Wont See You Tonight Part 1,
Betrayed,
Remenissions (Heavy verses with an acousticy chorus).

Maybe, if you haven't already. Take a listen to them. You might get some ideas/inspiration. If you like Avenged that is, most people on UG hate them.
I deeply regret the 6661 in my username. Siiiigh. Damn you, 14 year old me, you edgy little bastard.