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A new song I just whipped up, some critiques and comments would be really helpful and appreciated.


Deathbed

Why did you empty my soul
Why did you inject me with hate
I can’t feel these things
I don’t know what to make
Of the noise in my head
Can you call the nurse here
You needn’t wait with me
I’m sure it’s you I can’t bear

And there’re some skeletons beneath this rickety bed
They’re screaming at me
It’s troubling my head
Filled with nausea and aches, and lack of respect
For you my sweet darling
Will you please close that door

Can you hear me coughing
Here I’m sputtering out words
That I swear I hardly mean
But words that I’ve heard
They spat from your voice
And flooded to mine
I don’t want them in here
I’d like to politely decline

And there’re some skeletons beneath this rickety bed
They’re screaming at me
It’s troubling my head
Filled with nausea and aches, and lack of respect
For you my sweet darling
Will you please close that door

And maybe I’ll catch fire from hell and from you
I’ll take it with grace
And an aspirin or two
With a side of disdain, and bitterness too
Just promise me one thing
And ****ing close that damn door