#1
this is just part of the lyrics
i'm still kinda working on them

can i get some tips and opinons please

"insomnia"


From angels we are born,
by devils we are taken,
this morbid fascination,
My Sleep I have forsaken
I’ve spend too long in silence,
depriving myself of dreams
I’m insomnia’s greatest friend
and it’s darker than it seams
Laid inside a bed of rock
stuffed to full of feathers
My Eyelids ever open ,
hitched upon there tethers
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#2
these are great lyrics for a metal song, kinda like cemetary gates by pantera, or like banned from heaven by children of bodom. i'd play this in a minor key.
Last edited by LD_Luke D at Aug 16, 2008,
#3
Quote by LD_Luke D
these are great lyrics for a metal song, kinda like cemetary gates by pantera, or like banned from heaven by children of bodom. i'd play this in a minor key.


I second that.
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#4
Really good. Agreed that minor key would be a must. Maybe a drop D song too.
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