#1
Allright, this is my first time trying to write lyrics. This is basically a collaboration between me and another guy from UG (I did however come up with most of it myself.).

I am trapped
confined
in this hollow place
strapped
to the walls
this maze I can not
escape

Two thousand years of torment
a trail of rotting corpses
in this hallway they lie
i am destined to not die

Forever trapped,
in this tomb of illusion,
watching life decay
my life, a delusion

The predators of time
they’re feeding on their prey
but will they come for me?
and set me free
from this everlasting pain
how long shall I stay
in this prison
of eternal dismay?

Forever trapped,
in this tomb of illusion,
watching life decay
there is no solution

The blood from my veins
smears the wall
of what remains
of this cursed hall

When eternal life
turns to numbing demise
the deeds I've done
have taken their toll

My soul I have lost
for the border I had crossed
I made the final sin
this can not be repaid

For I was betrayed
the reward was my demise
the actions i regret
I must now pay my debt
Last edited by Pingis_Or_Death at Aug 16, 2008,
#3
Quote by Tubyboulin
sounds pretty cool, one thing i would change though is this:

"i am destined to not die"

Try switching it to "I am detined not to die" It just flows better imo.

C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=936196


Yep, agreed. Also I really really like it. It reminds me of that episode from Stargate Atlantis with the Ancient ghost guys. But it sounds cool. Is it a hard rock song or what?
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#4
Quote by Rockstar729
Yep, agreed. Also I really really like it. It reminds me of that episode from Stargate Atlantis with the Ancient ghost guys. But it sounds cool. Is it a hard rock song or what?

Nah it's more of a metal song. You can check it out on my profile (without vocals, as of yet) if you feel like it.