#1
Hey, so this is my first serious attempt at writing lyrics.
It's supposed to be a simple kind of reminiscent/love song. A little childish, rambling, sung by a girl.
Any input would be appreciated. Thanks in advance.

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Close your eyes, love
There might be a storm outside
I'll hold you safe, don't you worry, love
When the levee breaks
I can't tell my tears from sea
Teardrops mix well with the salty ocean water

I try to hold my faith that
Someday things will be okay again
Call up memories to serve my wandering mind
Hold my gaze straight ahead
Don't look back, look up instead
You believe in things that never will appear

And he tells me
I'm a dreamer
And I'm going to have to learn to fall sometime
And he says to me
The end of the world is not tomorrow
So I might remember I am still alive

Revelations
Liberation on my mind
Ascertain my thoughts are what they should be
Hold your faith in love
Could be below, could be above
Doesn't matter what else you believe

There's a man upstage
With a guitar in his left hand
Saying when we learn to love, we will know peace
Sometimes I try
To hold faith in his old words
Circumstances, though, they lead me so astray

And he tells me
I'm a dreamer
And I'm going to have to learn to fall sometime
And he says to me
The end of the world is not tomorrow
So I might remember I am still alive

And the window
Frames a picture
Of a paradise that's paved and disappeared
I remember
If I believe that it's still there
Paradise is in my dreams, and it's in you

Open your eyes, love
Will you just look outside
Is the rain still there, or is it gone?
#2
i like it, not as cliche as most other love songs on this site, and you dont need to rime the words, so it doesnt feel forced in any way.
and i really like this part:

And he tells me
I'm a dreamer
And I'm going to have to learn to fall sometime
And he says to me
The end of the world is not tomorrow
So I might remember I am still alive

very original, could be something from my lifestory

(srry for grammar and such, im dutch:P )
#3
Hi Chinese jazz, my name is Jarda. I have music band call Crossband. We are from Czech Republic. We are preparing new album our own music in Czech language but we are would like have some song in English. Can you help as anyway ? I have demo version with new songs. Do you try write any lyrics in our music? I have very good lyrics. It´s really nice.