#1
This is a song about world war II. It's about my greatgrandad who wrote a letter to my grandma telling her he'd be home before christmas, but he died a prisoner of war. It's a sad sounding ska punk tune. Crit 4 Crit.

Verse:
Memories of home keep running through my head
As I read the letters that my family sent
There words give me encouragement
As I'm stuck in this nightmare
In the trenches of sorrow and despair

Chorus: (Not perfectly happy with this part)
Fighting for our freedom, we march of to war
To rid us of the nazi scum, Is what we're fighting for
They told as you were cartured
But we still prayed you'd come home
You died a hero...

Verse:
I've experienced first hand
The cruelty of humanity
The massacre of millions
We fight to make them free... all I got for now
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#2
I like it, the chorus is kinda sketchy but the verses are really good

In the trenches of sorrow and despair

I like that line. I understand its a punk song so its kinda simple and chanty but good job.


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#3
Quote by Descendent-182
This is a song about world war II. It's about my greatgrandad who wrote a letter to my grandma telling her he'd be home before christmas, but he died a prisoner of war. It's a sad sounding ska punk tune. Crit 4 Crit.

Verse:
Memories of home keep running through my head
As I read the letters that my family sent
There words give me encouragement
*Their
As I'm stuck in this nightmare
In the trenches of sorrow and despair
pretty good first verse, sets up the feeling of the rest of the song

Chorus: (Not perfectly happy with this part)
Fighting for our freedom, we march of to war
*off
To rid us of the nazi scum, Is what we're fighting for
this line kinda ruins the whole chorus for me
They told as you were cartured
*Captured(?)
But we still prayed you'd come home
You died a hero...
love these last two lines

Verse:
I've experienced first hand
The cruelty of humanity
The massacre of millions
We fight to make them free
good but needs more

... all I got for now


it was a decent song but def. needs a bit of editing for spelling and such, also a bit more on that second verse and the chorus needs some major editing as well (the whole "Nazi scum" thing. Anyway you have a great idea and a great backbone to make a great song

Here's mine
If you could take a look at it and lemme know whatcha think that'd be great
Thanks
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=938331