#1
This is about a girl that I was talking to at the beginning of the summer who i really liked a lot, but it turned out she had been talking to someone else and wasn't interested in me at all. The biggest heartbreakk I've ever had.

So depressed
So denied
Can you please
Help me hide
From the pain
You're all i can gain from life

Feeling so
hypnotized
All i want
is somewhere to hide
Time passes quickly when i hide

Bring me back to life
So i can live it right with you
Bring me back to life
It's the least you can do
Bring me back to life
I can see it through
You know it's the right thing to do

I'm back
So alive
Try to break me
This time
I'm Stronger than last time

Bring me back to life
So i can live it right with you
Bring me back to life
It's the least you can do
Bring me back to life
I can see it through
You know it's the right thing to do

(guitar solo)

Bring me back to life
So i can live it right with you
Bring me back to life
It's the least you can do
Bring me back to life
I can see it through
You know it's the right thing to do (repeat)
My Gear:
Squier Stratocaster
Line 6 Spider III 75w
Line 6 FBV Express

Wanted Gear:
Gibson Les Paul
Gibson ES335
Marshall JVM410H
Marshall JCM800
Dunlop Crybaby
#2
Feeling so
hypnotized
All i want
is somewhere to hide
Time passes quickly when i hide

that last line seems irrelevant, do you want time to pass faster or are you just making a statement?


Bring me back to life
So i can live it right with you
Bring me back to life
It's the least you can do
Bring me back to life
I can see it through
You know it's the right thing to do

you know its the right thing to do, why? has the other person harmed you in some way? talk about that. visuals paint the pain with words maybe? also you make it seem like theyre the only person who can bring you back, but then you mysteriously come back by yourself.

I'm back
So alive
Try to break me
This time
I'm Stronger than last time

this makes sense in that which they (the other party) harmed you before. i like the strength it shows but it doesnt go with you being weak in the rest of the song. it seems like there are a lot of good ideas in this song but its not focused enough. too many conflicting emotions maybe? crit for crit?
#5
Quote by 90's_rocker
Feeling so
hypnotized
All i want
is somewhere to hide
Time passes quickly when i hide

that last line seems irrelevant, do you want time to pass faster or are you just making a statement?


I want time to pass faster. It has to do with me just wanting the feeling to be done with already, not wanting the heartache to continue.


Quote by 90's_rocker
Bring me back to life
So i can live it right with you
Bring me back to life
It's the least you can do
Bring me back to life
I can see it through
You know it's the right thing to do

you know its the right thing to do, why? has the other person harmed you in some way? talk about that. visuals paint the pain with words maybe? also you make it seem like theyre the only person who can bring you back, but then you mysteriously come back by yourself.

thats the point of the 3rd verse.

It's a ballad, I'm broken and weak in the first verse. the second verse is basically just trying to deal with my emotions but in a bad way, trying to hide from them. The third verse is when i realize that its time to get over it, quit hiding from my emotions and recognize them, so i can forget about them.

Quote by 90's_rocker
I'm back
So alive
Try to break me
This time
I'm Stronger than last time

this makes sense in that which they (the other party) harmed you before. i like the strength it shows but it doesnt go with you being weak in the rest of the song. it seems like there are a lot of good ideas in this song but its not focused enough. too many conflicting emotions maybe? crit for crit?


like i said before, its a ballad, a story of myself and my emotions.
My Gear:
Squier Stratocaster
Line 6 Spider III 75w
Line 6 FBV Express

Wanted Gear:
Gibson Les Paul
Gibson ES335
Marshall JVM410H
Marshall JCM800
Dunlop Crybaby