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I read as much of the FAQ's and rules as I could before posting, mainly because the posts I read on this board never seem to include chords so I wasn't sure if that was kosher or not.

This is my first ever attempt at writing a song so please be gentle :P

I didn't think I could even try writing a song because I know so little about music theory for chord progressions and vocals that harmonize with the chords. The first thing I noticed was that I had to keep changing lyrics to make it work with the rhythm of the song. Some lines that sound cool when read just wouldn't jive with the guitar strumming.

Basically I feel like I have to compromise a bit on my poetry when turning it into a song, so it might not read the greatest but it works with the chords and strumming!

How I seem to Be



[VERSE 1]
G                             Cadd9
She put the emphasis on words that I wouldn't use
G                         Cadd9
Smirking amused fact was I was confused
G
How could you see things in me that you
Cadd9
want to believe
Am                          C
As far as I was concerned the whole damn world could bleed


[CHORUS]
Em
And arrogance might be a sin but
G
if you're clever you can make it get whatever you need
Am                          
And if I'm lucky it could bring you even closer to me
Cadd9                                                 Bm / C Am
You could love me here and now in spite of how I seem to be


[VERSE 2]
G
there's someone out there for you
   Cadd9
it just doesn't seem to be me
G
And I don't know how you feel about
Cadd9
shootin' the breeze (with me)
Am                  C
She wants to travel maybe visit the stars


[BRIDGE]
Am                          Bm
And I can't have her if she ever gets that far
D                                  Bm
I don't wanna be 'round her if she ever goes that far
D                            Bm
My heart beats louder as she gets into that car
            C  Cadd9
And drives away

[CHORUS]
Em
And arrogance might be a sin but
G
if you're clever you can make it get whatever you need
Am                          
And if I'm lucky it could bring you even closer to me
Cadd9                                                 Bm / C Am
You could love me here and now in spite of how I seem to be


[VERSE 3]
G                                  Cadd9
She's doin' fine on her own and I'm getting by
G                                  Cadd9
Give her a ring on the phone every once in a while
Am                        C
Still wonder how I became just another guy


[CHORUS+]
Em
And arrogance might be a sin but
G
if you're clever you can make it get whatever you need
Am                          
And if I'm lucky it could bring you even closer to me
Cadd9                                                 Bm
You could love me here and now in spite of how I seem to be
Bm            Am
How I seem to be
                     G
But baby that's just me


I guess my thinking right now on this is whether or not it needs to be more linear/obvious in what the "story" is, or if its okay for it to be more vague/interpretive. I don't know if some of the lines seem meaningless without more context. Thing is it's really a hodgepodge of things I've felt or had happen in several relationships, not strictly the story of one love (requited or not) or a breakup.

One line in particular that I like but don't know if it sounds retarded is "if you're clever you can make it get whatever you need"... the punctuation is intentionally open as on one hand it can be a stand alone statement about cleverness being enough to get by or succeed; on the flip side it can be an extension of the previous line, meaning that if you're clever you can make arrogance work for you (which is more what I had in mind originally).
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Epi Les Paul
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Shure SM57
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Last edited by Aitrus at Aug 21, 2008,