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Ok so I've written my song lyrics but I know it needs major improvements.
If you guys wouldn't mind sending tips and feedback for improvements that'd be awesome.
Thanks.
This song is about a bus and a girl kind of... =]

The doors folding out,
it's your choice now,
will you think about,
what your doing to me now.

Hitch a ride with me,
it's only a matter of time,
your presence makes me not so lonely,
stay with me now and be mine.

Pay now, for the ticket of a lifetime,
your future begins in this seat next to mine,
Unexpected arrival at the bus station,
your confused, but really your my destination

Next stop, end of the line,
will you come with me now,
you tell me you'll be fine,
she breaks me, she brings me down...

She breaks me!! She brings me down!!
Taken' my heart, I'm back to the start,
no fooling around.
(background echo): "you took my feet off the ground" x2

Pay now, for the ticket of a lifetime,
your future begins in this seat next to mine.

Bus stop station, it's an awkward situation,
now I'm lost and confused at an unknown destination.