#1
So what do you all think of this poem. I dont really write poetry a lot but lately I was in the mood to write so I did. Here it is:

To claim a war
to bargain with the devil
one a malapropism to the other.
The true death of the poet will revel itself sooner
than any conspiracy we choose to believe in.
Dwell only on the important.
Modern marvels have done it
our freedom taken from us
right before our very eyes.
Manipulation reveals itself once again.
What is self interest
if we cant mind for each other.
The legacy set forth upon us
slowly takes its leave.
Floating down rivers will not solve your problems
For they always have an end.
Take a ride on the celestial highway
The answer will come along the way.
#3
Songwriting/Lyrics forum, dude

I kinda liked it, though.
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#6
i like it, and im not going to be a doush bag and say its in the wrong forum because who ****in cares
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#7
It was okay. Some great ideas in there.
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#8
Quote by jonnyrotten45
i like it, and im not going to be a doush bag and say its in the wrong forum because who ****in cares

I care because if there were no rules I could make a jazz thread in the hardcore forum and nobody would post to it. This is spam in the pit, and doesn't belong here.


And you sure aren't minnesota nice like everyone else that lives here.
#9
i didnt post it in the songwriting forum because there is a difference between songs and poems. heres another one

Adding layers as years go by
the work is never completed
when one creation falls
the other quickly follows
Only to be built again.
#10
Quote by GetOffMyCloud
i didnt post it in the songwriting forum because there is a difference between songs and poems. heres another one

Adding layers as years go by
the work is never completed
when one creation falls
the other quickly follows
Only to be built again.

Yes there is a difference between songs and poems, but poems are included in the songwriting forum. If you would have taken your time to make sure you posted in the right place, you would have been saved of the embrassment. Seriously TS, you're being an idiot.