#1
Hey all, I've only been writing songs for about half a year, and i just figured I'd post a select few here for feedback.


Breakaway

Poisoned by wise youth
That lies to you like truth
Ending innocence, strangling sleep
No rest for my mind
From crisscrossing red lines
The faraway dream of relief

I'm battling to breathe
Struggling to breakaway
I'm down on my knees
Begging you to breakaway
Helpless but to heed
Battling to breakaway
You brought me to my knees

Friendship and comfort bind
Sacrifice peace of mind
To keep making that green one red
Ease your cluttered heart's load
Take no solace in crossroads
Please let me inside your head

I know where you're coming from this time
I know where you're coming from


2 hrs

Life moves so fast
We've got no time to take our time
Lights are shining
On me
I feel like I'm moving
But I know I'm still in the same place
I've always been.
I'm just waiting to be found

And I'm sick of it

It's been two hours so far baby
And I don't even know what's wrong
I think I've trapped myself
The clock is ticking in front of me
How can every second last so long?
And now I'm crying out for help.

You're so degrading.
Your friends all get their kicks at my expense
We're fading away
And tearing apart
At the seams and the foundations
That we'd thought we'd built so strong but I guess
That we were wrong
About everything

And I'm sick of it

It's been two hours so far baby
And I don't even know what's wrong
I think I've trapped myself
The clock is ticking in front of me
How can every second last so long?
And now I'm crying out for help.

Now I'm living
But I guess that's all that can be said about me
I'm trying to forgive
But it's tough
"Don't get your hopes up,
I'm trying to protect you." This role reversal
Is killing me with its irony, when
I was the one trying hard enough

And I'm sick of it

It's been two hours so far baby
And I don't even know what's wrong
I think I've trapped myself
The clock is ticking in front of me
How can every second last so long?
And now I'm crying out for help.

And now I'm crying out for you.
#2
Please re-read the forum rules (because I'm sure you did) and re-post only one of these in the correct titular format.
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いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


"Success is as dangerous as failure. Hope is as hollow as fear." - from Tao Te Ching