#1
Looking for comments on my newest song. You can listen on purevolume here: http://www.purevolume.com/darcyhartwick or just click in profile.

I wanted the vocals at the end to be more grandiose but my voice was giving out by this point as the song is a bit higher than I usually sing (this is intended tho, I capo'd 2nd fret to make it sound brighter - voice just has to catch up).

Will listen and crit anything in return for comments
My Gear
Epi Les Paul
Roland Microcube
Boss DS-1 pedal
Shure SM57
M-Audio Fasttrack
#2
at first listen i thought, a mix of nick drake and snow patrol

very straightforward lyrics and that works with your tune...especially when the music gets a ltitle more full

i think an acoustic guitar would do you wonders VS an electric one

try to sing without that capo but really sing out and see if that works

overall i like it. 3/5 =)

check out mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=950612
#3
I have an acoustic but have never tried recording it, this is definitely worth a shot since I agree the electric without distortion leaves something to be desired. Can try capo in different spots too but I wanted to use it for a "bright" sound and to keep all my stuff from starting to sound the same.

Thanks for the comments tho, helpful! I'll check your tune out later from home
My Gear
Epi Les Paul
Roland Microcube
Boss DS-1 pedal
Shure SM57
M-Audio Fasttrack
#4
Thanks for the crit. First off, I really enjoyed this tune. You have a nice, mellow voice and the lyrics fit and flow very well. I thought it was pretty catchy, which is quite rare when you just got a guitar and a mic. Theres nothing i can say to improve other than, build on what you got, eg, add extra leads etc. Overall good work. Well done.
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Last edited by yoyo9333 at Sep 4, 2008,