Well, I've got this chorus I wrote. Probably gonna be some poppish/electronic/maybe acoustic song.

When the dark turns light
ignited is my heart
it could have shot to the stars
like a rocket in the night

I'm not too sure about the first line. Any ideas?
What do you guys think? Please crit. Harsh or not! I want it all.
Crit for Crit too.

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