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Hey...so I'm new at this whole "post your lyrics and have people critique them" thing. Please be completely and brutally honest if need be. I guess I should point out, though, that this did originally start off as a poem before I put it to music. Right now it only has an acoustic guitar backing, though if I did want to expand it to a full-band version, in a perfect world I'd want it to sound like "Second Stage Turbine Blade"-era Coheed and Cambria. Anyways, fire away!

How the Hell Could I

Can’t life be just a little bit curious
In the way it pulls you sideways
Into situations of degradation
Sugarcoated in a shell of romance
And aren’t we all a bit foolish
With how we think the mind is above the heart
When deep down we don’t stand a chance

Weren’t you meant to be a miracle?
Perhaps a divine intervention
With intentions perhaps less than angelic
But pray that I never recover from the pain
Oh God, how I bled on the inside
On those nights where other men kept you warm
And I laid there cold and nauseous

Shouldn’t I have been the one to cry?
And yet your tears are gushing through the receiver
Flooding my brain with a thousand questions, but my
Heart remains a desert…which is just how you left it

How in the hell could I have been so dumb?
How in the hell could I have been so dumb?
How in the hell could I have been so dumb?
How in the hell could I…