#1
Dark to Dark

Dark To dark
To dark to see
The only people there
is you
and me
But why can’t it just be me
Without you in there I could be free
But without you I wouldn’t be me
I’m use to you
You’re the dark that’s closed around me
How can I get rid of you
Just let me be
But in yet
your still here
In my head
In my fear
I don’t need you
I need someone to clear my tear
All you are is my fear
But I don’t want that,
any of that
I want someone clear
So I can get some light
to show away my fear
And yet your still here
I need out
Out of here
Out of my fears
Out of my tears
I know I’m not alone
But I can’t see
I need someone to help me
I need someone to help me through the dark
And into the light
To fight
But I need out fast
Time doesn’t last
I need you to set me free
Are you there?
Can you help me?
~Chris McPartlin
#2
I enjoyed this. But it doesnt seem like a song to me, more of a poem, but then again (and this is what really sucks) I dont know how it would be sung. Some people can twist a word's sound pretty crazily. Wouldnt it be nice if we could put voice recordings on here along with our lyrics?... We dont have that right???
Sorry that really doesnt have a place in this. Lets see...the underlined stuff needs work...
I want someone clear
So I can get some light
to show away my fear

And yet your still here

Other than that it seems to flow okay.
Hope I helped...