#1
So this is the first song I have ever written. Go easy on it, okay?


Dreamer Girl

Dreamer Girl, your mind is overseas.
I know you paint your wings.
Your eyes will sparkle in the night,
I hope your dreams will come alive when you sleep.

Dreamer Girl, I caught you dozing off one day,
But I just shied away. Oh God I hope that you never change.

The world’s alive, inside your mind, but not in mine.
But then the characters in mine suddenly felt divine.

They wanted to shout, they wanted to scream,
It felt like the colors were bursting at the seam,
Urging me to go on.
I saw you passing by, but I just turned my eyes.

Dreamer Girl, your mind is overseas.
I know you paint your wings.
Your eyes will sparkle in the night,
I hope your dreams will come alive when you sleep.

Dreamer girl, I remember that quiet day,
Oh why did I shy away? Oh please, please don’t go away.

And when you smile, it takes me a while to figure out, I’m still on Earth.
Because the angels in your smile lift me up a thousand miles.

And afterwards you say, “Hey, are you alright?”
I just nod and reply, “Sure I am, goodnight.”
And then I walk towards my car with a smile on my face.
Oh now I know what it’s like to be flying in space.

Dreamer Girl, oh don’t you see that I’ve found my place in the galaxy.
Oh girl, just keep dreamin’ overseas.
Oh girl, keep on dreamin’ overseas.
Dreamer girl, just keep dreamin’.
#2
like its really good, but you gotta present it well, cuz dreamer girl is on the cheesy side lol
#4
"The world’s alive, inside your mind, but not in mine" ... excellent line!!

Overall, it was a good read, and closer to an actual song if you're going that route than most on these boards. Some parts were hard to read, so I'd be interested to see how you put it into a song. I liked the chorus, and although I thought it was a little vague based on the verses, it got me thinking for sure. Good premise for the peace too. An eligant way of talking about the infamous "butterflies"
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LEARN:
It's not always rainbows and butterflies,
It's compromise that moves us along. -- Maroon 5
#6
Hey all! Thanks for the comments! I never thought I was a good writer. And the reason why it may sound vague is because it's really about this girl that I like, so you'd kind of have to know her and me and her friends to really understand it.