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ill see how you all respond to these and depending on the feedback ill post more

first is a sonnet i wrote 2 years ago in english for a shakespeare lesson:
written in iambic penameter with ababcdcdee rhyme scheme...


Sentiments for the Devil


As I move towards the great western blue sky,
As my days are ending, as time draws near
I hold my ethics so he can see my
Beliefs, says he was only ever here
To call upon my mistakes to comment
On my Dastardly deeds, but he forgave
The obvious flaws in my sentiments.
For the devil perched on my shoulder, that saves
Me from every cheap shot at my complex
Ego and makes me forget the dreams I
Closely held in the highest regards, wrecks
The lies I create to make you cry
The burning in my ears says that I care,
He is naught but a total waste of air


this next one is one i wrote recently, went kind off on a tangent after i wrote a verse comparing a failing relationship to the destruction of a building...
i chose this to show you all because i like the set up of it =]

T-9

Demolition set at t-minus 9
9: is there any more time?
8: you were really never that great
7: tear me down so you can rise again
6: is this really what you want to do?
5: I was always a fool for you
4: hurry up and shut the door
3: hurry up and hit the floor
2: close your eyes and pull the trigger
1: hold your breath it won’t hurt for long

Demolition set at t-minus 9
We’re all out of time
Hell Yeah! We’re all going to die!
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What if I accidentally wee in her?


When I arrive will God be waiting and pacing around his throne?
Will he feel a little Old Testament?
And will he celebrate with fire and brimstone
Yeah, I admit, I am afraid of the reckoning
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let me know what you all think, and any constructive criticism would be appreciated
Quote by filthandfury
What if I accidentally wee in her?


When I arrive will God be waiting and pacing around his throne?
Will he feel a little Old Testament?
And will he celebrate with fire and brimstone
Yeah, I admit, I am afraid of the reckoning