#1
THis is my second song, and i dont think that it is quite as good as my first. You probably can't hear me singing too loud because I don't really have any lyrics that I want to use for the song... Im just singing impromptu lyrics to the vocal pattern I want. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE comment on the song after listening to it... I NEED TO KNOW IF IT IS GOOD OR BAD. I have been playing for ten months now, and this is my second song. Again, PLEASE COMMENT!!!!!

http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/otacon17/music/all/play415172
#2
its not bad, just throw a few more riffs in the
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#3
ya, i need to work on making songs a little bit more... complex i guess, cause theyre always too simple and somewhat repetitive... o well, i got plenty of time to work on that
#4
Quote by otacon17
ya, i need to work on making songs a little bit more... complex i guess, cause theyre always too simple and somewhat repetitive... o well, i got plenty of time to work on that


thats usually how everyone is when they first start off. I remember when i wrote my first song it was very repetitive and the guitar parts were more then predictable. But as time went on, i got better and new parts came to me constantly and i was able to write songs with only a little and sometime no repetition at all (other then the core parts of the song that were necessary to repeat... and what i absolutely wanted to repeat)


listen to my new song: http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=16268311#post16268311

One thing that i do when im writing a song and i cant think of more ideas is that i just mix up the ideas ive already used in the particular song. I use repetition but when a part repeats (other then the chorus) it never sounds exactly the same. Im using the same idea but in a different way then how i previously used it.