#1
This is a new short piece i wrote.
Ideas for a name?
Crit for crit and all that stuff.


This morning your eyes
Little black faces
Death masks

Look at me through your closed eyes
Throws of dusk hide your thoughts
And in this shade of night

Eyes wide like the silvery moon
Tonight is but another dream
Of you

Feathers bound by chain
How curious these little wings
Cast big shadows
#2
Very descriptive. I don't have any ideas about names for this. I like it but it just seems to be too short. Seems to be more of a poem than song but other than that it still is good. Keep up the good work.
Crit my song Ignorance of the Safe
Ignorance of the Safe