#1
ok guys so i really dont have much of a band just trying my hardest to get one started
im 13 and heres wht i got so far from a song i call "my own cause" its not my best so far but i am trying

Chorus
Girl you looked me in the eyes yeah
you told me that you needed me
then you go and cut me down
That put me in the ground

Verse 1
I gave up all i had for you
It didn't matter at all what I do
Reflected on the pain that i have had
And now im laying here down in the ground
listening for a simple sound
a beat, a bang, anything
I see fire blaz3, the water's gone
trying my best, trying to move on

Chorus
Verse2:
6 feet under all is lost
You gave me up, no matter the cost
But all that i spent for you doesnt matter now
Cause i am here stuck in the ground

Bridge:
His hate it flows
from head to toe
His hate is bred
Shot in the head
On my own cause
Chorus

thats all i got so far guys
and advice is taken to heart peace
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#2
im not gna get hardcore about this but i thought it was okay. the secong chorus coud have been a wee bit longer. and the bridge u go from first person to third then to first again, im not crazy about that but it could be ur style. and in the verses u sound sad but in the bridge u switch to hate...but i do like the songother than that =]
#5
Nice =D
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#6
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that's nice
personal experiences?


maybe..
Quote by Jackolas
You are my favorite August 08er, sir!


One day, when the time has come,
The truth will shine, we'll never run.
We both know just how feel,
I'm praying to god that this is real.