#1
my friend you'd never guess what they strapped to my chest
heres a hint its not my heart, they said its a new start
they said ill become a man, they said ill see my family again

Ill die for a cause, for a god, and when all hope is gone ill be your light

all i breath are the words you speak your the answer to all my prayers
and as i fall i know that ill be saved, by stars and stripes

Soon ill be leaving here another year another
Will i make it home, will i be left to die alone
maybe this kid will know, this kid that seems to glow

maybe when my body burns, their smiles will twist and turn, and they'll realize that i had a life

all i breath are the words you speak your the answer to all my prayers
and as i fall i know that ill be saved, by stars and stripes

And as i hit the ground i smile at this war, knowing that this flag wasn't worth dying for
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