#1
Just watched the Metallica DVD that came with Death Magnetic, and got a tonne of inspiration, so I pounced on the opportunity to write a song :P
Recorded my Mesa Dual Rectifier with an SM57. A couple parts I can hear some distortion in the mix, which I couldn't really get rid of easily, so I left it. Mostly interested on thoughts about the song arrangement.

"My Redemption"
www.myspace.com/triameraband
http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/juzcook/
http://www.icompositions.com/music/song.php?sid=96284

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#4
Good arrangeent/progressions. Produciton isnt pro but then you did it yourself, and for self produced you did REALLY ****ing well! Personally i think this would benefit from lyrics, in their absence il give it 7/10 with vocals of equal quality ot the music you could bup that up to an 8 or 9. Only criticism is the clean section could do with a smoother clean tone.

Nice work mate! Crit mine if u got the time https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=960238
#5
Crit as I listen.
Intro section doesn't strike me as particularly original or well played compared to some of your other stuff, could do with work.
Verse is pretty cool, fairly solid.
I really dig the chorus though, quite a groove, got a nice pulse
Really like the clean interlude. Quite bluesy chord progression. Niiicely done.
Really dig the riff under the solo. Nice soloing too. Pretty hard rock-ish.

Production's not as good as your other stuff, but it's pretty good musically.
THe chorus lead's a bit cheese, but there's a lot of potential there with this tune.

7/10

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https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=16387173#post16387173
Last edited by Dream Pin at Sep 22, 2008,
#6
ok so! i tidied up some of the mix, and used my drumkit from hell samples for the first time... and i think youll find it improves the mix considerably. ive updated the links on both the myspace and UG profiles

Quote by Dream Pin
Really dig the riff under the solo. Nice soloing too. Pretty hard rock-ish.]

wasnt sure if anyone would pick up on the riff underneath, i was wondering if i shouldve used it somewhere more open :P