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my band wrote this song about id say 3 weeks ago. its the first song we wrote so i guess its a start.


verse:

take your time as we move along
no need to rush we'll soon be gone
there is a spirit that sits inside you
take your time before we are through

Chorus:

Take your time
oh, tiake your time
take your time

Verse:

Live your life before its through
Happiness is bound to come to you
each step you take you find decision to fake
your decision results in what you make

repeat chorus

Slow solo

Verse:

Although th time has passed
your journey through life is through at last


thats it
Tell me what you think
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#2
Quote by doompers7491
my band wrote this song about id say 3 weeks ago. its the first song we wrote so i guess its a start.


verse:

take your time as we move along
no need to rush we'll soon be gone
there is a spirit that sits inside you
take your time before we are through

I will keep in mind this is a beginner writting (as am I) and I will be polite: I really like the use of "take your time" but I have to say the whole thing confuses me and I really can't find a meaning to it unless of course its very straight foreward then I look like a fool. Rhyming :Along gone I dislike.

Chorus:

Take your time
oh, tiake your time
take your time
besides that spelling error it looks good... I am a sucker for repition

Verse:

Live your life before its through
Happiness is bound to come to you
each step you take you find decision to fake
your decision results in what you make
The rhyming is becoming very forced on those last two lines and you should remember. Not everything has to rhyme

repeat chorus

Slow solo

Verse:

Although th time has passed
your journey through life is through at last
What an ending! I really liked it. Are you sure you have never written songs before.


thats it
Tell me what you think


Overall its a very good beginner piece

please find time to crit mine
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