#1
Alright well heres my latest piece, hope I'm improving somewhat :P
c4c upon request
Its really just based on some feeling I've had lately especially the last line.
What if I could pause time?
Rewind, oh how sublime
Fastfoward, what a show
Life moving like a motion picture

Stop
Restart, take a new step
In an old direction
Find my way again

What if this time
Life were a little different
Not better
But certainly not worse

Next chapter
Skipped what mattered most
Time to find that remote
Hit the backwards chevrons

Stop,
Restart, take an old step
And turn it around
Ill surely find a better route

What if I don't?
What if I get lost all over again?
What if we're stuck here?
What if we didn't ask what if?


Thanks guys
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awesome avatar,denn0069!
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ever.
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#3
Thanks
Glad to hear you could connect to it.
As I had started writing one before in the intention of it describing something very specific to me but be able to embody something completely different from someone else's perspective ended up scarping it, then reworking with the bits I liked to create this.
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awesome avatar,denn0069!
Quote by Valo
The most truth I've heard in the pit.
ever.
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#4
It's mostly the last four lines, it's weird how it kind of sounds like something i've been thinking about for a while. Anyways, great job, and thanks for critiquing mine.
#5
wow, deep. makes you think about the regrets you have in life. almost like that movie click, why cant we rewind fast forward. beautiful
#7
Thanks guys

jonathonbrad: Ya you can for sure use it, I mean of course I'm still gonna be making a version and like I reserve the rights, but go ahead and use it if you want I'd definitely love to hear what you guys do with it to if that would possible.
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awesome avatar,denn0069!
Quote by Valo
The most truth I've heard in the pit.
ever.
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