#1
crit4crit of course. I wrote this in about 15 minutes so it could definately use some fine tuning, but it's pretty much just about being in love with someone who all your friends hate.

On the second day of summer,
The world came crashing down,
You said she’s invisible,
She said she’s invisible.

And on the final day of winter,
To my heart’s discontent,
You said she’s invisible,
I know you’re invisible.

Hey boy,
You’ll never live this down,
Hey girl,
You figured me out,
Figured me out.

Hey boy,
You’ll never live this down,
Hey girl,
You figured me out,
Figured me out.

And on the second day of summer,
Your house burnt to the ground,
You said she’s invisible,
She showed she’s invisible.

Autumn leaves were falling,
Nights were growing cold,
I heard she’s invisible,
Who cares?
You’re invisible.

Hey boy,
You’ll never live this down,
Hey girl,
You figured me out,
Figured me out.

Hey boy,
You’ll never live this down,
Hey girl,
You figured me out,
Figured me out.

(Guitar solo)


We wont stand for this,
We wont stand for this,
We wont stand for this,
We wont stand for…

Hey boy,
You’ll never live this down,
Hey girl,
You figured me out,
Figured me out.

Hey boy,
You’ll never live this down,
Hey girl,
You figured me out,
Figured me out.
I'm here to help

Quote by Jimbleton
ok, as usual pit is being very unhelpful except andychalmers, so im gonna go post this someplace else


And a master of storytelling...

Quote by Jackolas
andychalmers102, that story is awesome.
#2
I suggest labelling the chorus, and just writing Chorus x1, rather than repeating it.
It makes the post long, and much of the text moot.

Nickelback much?