#1
Gimme Fear

(Verse)
Do the chains that bind restrict your mind from thinkin' out the box
Do yer stay in line, spend all the time just wishing down the clocks
Or do yer wana break in to a life of sin and V I C E just livin' in the city
Its a dirty, playful love affair
Many a man tied to many a chair

(Chorus)
So give me fear, and be mine
Roll back the years and be time
Cos love is free and love is kind, let it come and heal my mind
Cos now, I got the fear
Yeah now I Got the fear

(Verse)
Nothin' has been firing from the barrel of my gun
Since I've been livin' on the south side of the sun
My days are dark, troubled are the times
Fallen apart and shattered are the lives


(Chorus)
So give me fear, and be mine
Roll back the years and be time
Cos love is free and love is kind, let it come and heal my mind
Cos now, I got the fear
Yeah now I Got the fear


Its a sort of wild psychadelic tune...3 chords...Rhythm a bit like Beatles' Tomorrow never knows!

Any criticism/advice/praise welcome!
Cheers
#4
I really liked it, I thought it had good rhyme scheme and it flowed great with the way I was reading it. I felt it was great, hey give me some critique on my first post would ya? Much appreciated!