#1
If I do not set goals
I can not fail
If I do not dream up dreams
Of places and feelings
Nonexistance can not come true
If i do not set expectations
Nothing will live up to nothing
I will not hurt, I will not thrive
I will be nothing, and hope
Everyone will be nothing beside me.
Last edited by Dylan_ at Sep 25, 2008,
#2
i think you mean nonexistence, unless it was an intentional play on the word to mean "to reverse the act of existing".

other than that, i know how it feels, dude. not bad.
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#4
Nice, I've been at that point. It's a pretty empty feeling, and this portrays it pretty well. Great job.
#5
I think it captures your feelings real well but its not that interesting.
It just didn't really do a lot for me, but its still good.
good job man.
#6
Quote by Dylan_
If I do not set goals
I can not fail
great start
If I do not dream up dreams
Of places and feelings
i think this would work just as well if you slimmed it down to "i do not dream of places and feelings" but that's up to you
Nonexistance can not come true
If i do not set expectations
Nothing will live up to nothing
great
I will not hurt, I will not thrive
I will be nothing, and hope
Everyone will be nothing beside me
powerful ending


this was great, best i've read on here in a while, though i haven't been on much lately, but i loved it nonetheless, only things i could possibly say is to watch out for all of those "nothings" towards the end and maybe change up those two lines i suggested but this is GREAT as it is, very nice job

take a look at mine? thanks- Matlock
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=965535