#1
disgrace the ones who loved for you
simply described contemplations
implored and explored past expectation

race
race
when does the line finish?
segmented and labeled as real
grasping for an edge that was really never there
face first,it hurts
just as much as its supposed too

numbers and figures took into consideration just to come up short
waiting for the decimal to move itself into the safety of a whole


incomplete
summing
rounding
concepts of intangible
thought to once hold meaning
eyes blue-black written though series
printed so boldly and intact
as soft progression pushes toward infinity


yeah im back


my friend just hung herself.....and i was supposed to hang out with her today..maybe i could have prevented it..IDK.......im emotionless but i guess i let my words hold all the emotion
Reaching for the sun
one may forget
the feet which
ground him
Last edited by bigbirdfan at Sep 26, 2008,
#2
Quote by bigbirdfan
disgrace the ones who loved for you
simply described contemplations
implored and explored past expectation

race
race
when does the line finish?
segmented and labeled as real
grasping for an edge that was really never there
face first,it hurts
just as much as its supposed too
not too much to say, i like what you've got so far

numbers and figures took into consideration just to come up short
love this line
waiting for the decimal to move itself into the safety of a whole
another great line

incomplete
summing
rounding
concepts of intangible
thought to once hold meaning
eyes blue-black written though series
printed so boldly and intact
as soft progression pushes toward infinity
great, i'm not sure if lines 5 and 6 fit as well here as the others though


yeah im back


my friend just hung herself.....and i was supposed to hang out with her today..maybe i could have prevented it..IDK.......im emotionless but i guess i let my words hold all the emotion


sorry to hear that


all in all, good work, not too much to really say, well done

take a look at mine and lemme know what u think? thanks
http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=965535
#3
Looks good. Not bad structure. Sorry for youre loss.
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