#1
Aside from the "I really liked it" and "Not really my style" type of replies, I haven't gotten any tips or suggestions on how to better my lyrics. Personally I feel most of my lyrics are a bit generic, but maybe that's just me... maybe I need to write about something else.. something that brings about different emotions then I'm used to writing about, I'm not sure.. anyway, let me know what you think

[verse one]
Why do I always think of bad things
The only thing that I want to do
Is get high and drunk today
But that’s nothing new for me
There are things I want to change
And choices I should have made
Now I’m sick and can’t get better
Wishing I had never met her

[chorus]
You see it’s just a part of me
All these lies and broken dreams
But there’s nothing I can do or say
Things will always be this way

[verse two]
Now I know what they can’t see
It’ll always be a part of me
Empty promises and tragedy
These are all inside of me
So I wrote this song tonight
With the hope you could see
Give it up and do what’s right
Or you’ll end up just like me

[chorus]
You see it’s just a part of me
All these lies and broken dreams
But there’s nothing I can do or say
Things will always be this way
#2
youre right its a bit generic but it sounds good.you got the theme right but maybe next time change some of the words, but not on this one.This one flow mostly good.

Why do I always think of bad things
The only thing that I want to do
Is get high and drunk today

this part sounds a bit weird, not a great poetry
#3
Yeah that part is a little wordy and awkward. I realize just saying it out loud it sounds a bit weird and the only reason I kept it is because somehow it flows well with the guitar in the song, but thanks for your honesty
#4
im not saying take it off, it has its meaning in the song and i understand and see it.try to make it flow better with words and guitar.
i know, its hard.damn hard. but you need to work hard to get a really nice song these days.
if you ever upload it sang by you PM me please , ok?:P:
#5
hey szeke, will do! I'm actually trying to get some recording time with a friend of mine that has a home studio, schedule conflicts keep getting in the way!
#6
Quote by oakleys09
hey szeke, will do! I'm actually trying to get some recording time with a friend of mine that has a home studio, schedule conflicts keep getting in the way!

nevermind the troubles look for the success in the horizon