#1
I'm in a very crazy mood. Some stuff happened today that made me really mad, so I decided to channel my anger into a song, hence the slight superfluity of it. But I like it, so I thought I'd put it up. Imagine a very Korn-esque background music playing behind it.

"Betraying my Insanity"

Please give me something
To quell, the growing insanity
You tell me it's in my head
But I hear it under my bed

Can you feel? (Ahhhhh)
It's so Goddamn real
Can you -- no!

(Please turn the lights out)

Can you hear the monster inside?
He no longer wants to run and hide
Say hello, and then goodbye
Goodbye you little piece of shit, you're gonna die!

My friendly little teddy bear
Told me, yes he said
He told me it's alright
Before his eyes turned red

Can you feel? (Ahhhhh)
It's so Goddamn real
Can you -- no!

(The sun helps me sleep)

Can you hear the monster inside?
He no longer wants to run and hide
Say hello, and then goodbye
Goodbye you little piece of shit, you're gonna die!

Break

You knew, I know you knew
That's why I'm ripping you
Apart, and through and through
I have to ask: What will you do?

Because I'm betraying my insanity

Altered Chorus

Can you hear the monster inside?
He's calling your name, you can no longer hide
Scream out for mommy, but please don't cry
Goodbye you little piece of shit, you're gonna die!
Alta Vera - My real life alternative rock band.
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Let me ask you, does a machine like yourself ever experience fear?

#2
****ing mental! Great piece, and great way to channel your anger!
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#3
Its pretty good man. An amazing rendering of your emotions. Saying that it has a korn-ish feel to it also made me appreciate it more, made more sense. Thankfully its not grindcore of anything
The part about the teddy bear really seemed to wake me up.
Its definitely good enough for you to try and put some music to it. Work on it, try to clear up the lyrics where it doesn't fit the flow of the song, and you should be fine.

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https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=16423252#post16423252