#1
OK so I got bored and made a quick song. I was quite pleased with it so tryed to improve bits of it here and there, and this is what I have so far, all constructive comments and suggestians welcome - please do!!!

Thanks
#2
Wrong section, put this is Original Recordings.
Ego inflating praise here:
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That is SOOOOOOOOOOO sig worthy! Pure awesomeness to you, sir.

C wut I did thar Fishy?

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#5
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Shut up.

Don't mind 'em, this is the right section. No worries, mate .

Do you honestly think I'd tell him it's in the wrong section if it wasn't? Don't be a fool. I was advising the guy, not insulting him, ffs.
Ego inflating praise here:
Quote by Fishyesque
That is SOOOOOOOOOOO sig worthy! Pure awesomeness to you, sir.

C wut I did thar Fishy?

's UG
#7
I don't know what dgme92 is talking about, but this definitely belongs in this forum, not Original Recordings. So, yes basically ignore him.

Anyway, your song has a great start, but there wasn't nearly enough of it. Make it a real song... You know a verse chorus bridge solo whatever.
#10
The riff could work as a breakdown, though I imagine it as more of a verse riff