#4
Great stuff - song has great structure and is interesting throughout. I'd be interested to hear it with the whole band - I can hear a melodic piano bit playing over the intro with vocals and guitar. Keep up the good work....

Peace
#5
Very catchy rhythm and lyrical flow. The vocals sound great, and they blend well with the guitar and compliment the lyrics very well. Also, the lyrics tell a good story with great imagery and a sensual delivery.

I don't know if you can think of any way to change it, but the "I just can't wait to kiss her" part throws me off a bit. The whole verse is spent talking to a "you," yet that one line refers to the girl in the third person. Maybe that's the point, and it just went over my head, but it irks me for some reason.

Thanks for your crit.