#1
Hi guys. My first post here at Ug. Thought Id start posting some of my lyrics. Feedback is welcomed. Peace


Verse:You were my hero.
Everything I wanted in a someone.
I looked into your eyes and saw the future so clearly.
My heart aches everyday,
For what we had, and what used to be.

Ive come to relize,
All those skeptical thoughts,
Were for you...
My hero,
My companion.
This I know is true.


Chorus: I killed my hero that day,
Killed myself aswell.
For that very mistake....
I deserve to go to hell.

I buried the truth.
All along the way,
For that special sin.
I cannot repay.

So now,
Here I am....
Ive finally reached zero.
Reminiscent of that day....
When I killed my hero.

Verse:
Looking at your grave,
Im suprised to see,
Your dead...Im alive.
And you have more life than me ?


I miss you so much.
I can still feel feel your hands on me,
I miss my hero.
Nothing will ever be the same.
I feel like im down by so much,
And I can NEVER win this game.

Chorus: I killed my hero that day,
Killed myself aswell.
For that very mistake....
I deserve to go to hell.

I buried the truth.
All along the way,
For that special sin.
I cannot repay.

So now,
Here I am....
Ive finally reached zero.
Reminiscent of that day....
When I killed my hero.


Verse:

So if come to the conclusion,
That your death isnt an illusion.
Praying has done nothing,
All hope is lost,
My hero is gone.
Her death, was my cost.

Here I am.
Ive finally reached zero.
Reminiscent of that day...
When I killed my hero.
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#2
Wow. Sounds great.
The first paragraph doesnt sound syllable balanced... Im wondering if itd still sound good...
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#3
Thanks Nick. In regards to the first paragraph. I suppose it depends how the vocalist would sing it, I think it would fly ok but I feel as if its an essential part of the song. But I can see 100% where your coming from . Thanks for the feedback, Cya !
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