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so i want to add a verse, and maybe think up a stronger chorus. any ideas? crit for crit


verse 1
I like to walk as if I'm proud
and when I talk I speak too loud
just so, no one will know
everyday is a charade
I can't take off the mask I've made
who knows how I feel?

chorus
I don't know how I feel
what is truly real?
I don't know how I feel
I'm as cold as steel

verse 2
the door is locked the window's closed
I hope I never get exposed
just so, no one will know
I would rather walk alone
grab my bud and go get stoned
who cares how i feel?

chorus
I don't care if I feel
nothing's truly real
I don't care if I feel
I'm as dead as steel