#1
Zero Gravity
Space confines then focuses.
A meteor.
The size of Tennessee.
It grins as it spins,
Amongst the endless walls of the universe.

Repetition.
Humanity sits at a table,
For two.
On one side, Life.
Clothed in rags.
Torn to pieces.

On the other side,
Death.
So elegantly dressed.
Fixated on nothing less,
Than the company it shares tonight.

Knock Knock,
On the door of the atmosphere
Someone, Something,
Wants to come in.
A meteor.
The Size of Tennessee.
With the personality of the Devil,
The Intentions of a Serial Killer.

Repetition.
Humanity sits at a table,
On one side,
Death.
Staring into the emptiness of where Life once sat.

Broken.
The door to existence,
Knocked down.
Repetition.
A meteor the size of Tennessee.
Storms into the earth.

Fire.
A world now engulfed in flames.
The elegant remains,
Of death,
Who eats alone tonight.

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This is my attempt at writing a different style. Tell me what you think.
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#2
this was really good:

On the other side,
Death.
So elegantly dressed.
Fixated on nothing less,
Than the company it shares tonight.

im not good at crit, sorry
i thought it was pretty good overall.
#3
Quote by reelbigfish2020
this was really good:

On the other side,
Death.
So elegantly dressed.
Fixated on nothing less,
Than the company it shares tonight.

im not good at crit, sorry
i thought it was pretty good overall.



Well Thanks

I would like some Crits for this one though.
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#7
I appreciate the feedback everyone I really do. I wrote this in Italian because I was board. lol

Still awaiting Crits !
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