#1
myself spilt
under lanterns of sheet music.
saying something
about you and i stealing gas masks
and condiments stuck on your mouth.
its good, but..
you tilt me.

my first was a brunette
she wore her skin tight
'round her ribs.
left cuts on her wrists to see if i'd notice
and lifted her skirt in library stacks
mumbling of literature.
i stripped her quick.
so much hesitance for her reputation
but, she felt like nothing
and i forgot the hours she tossed and i turned.
though i feel them now.

in the bar scene
i'm following blonde hair down lengthy legs.
she feels natural and easy
and through my days she drifts.
in and out,
casually.

casual is what had me
holding back frail limbs on the edge of balconies.
19 years of overdramatics dropped
and as i watched her twist to jump
the regret came spontaneously.
i wondered how nonchalant turned into
bruised knees and knife play
and slurred speech, and doll parts.
pale white hips begging for one more.

when she left,
those 19 years of theater shattered
glass replaced with tears i left on a friend's thigh.
though i feel them now.

the blonde sits in the passenger seat
picking shards from my tongue
trying to piece it back to some reminiscence .
does our 'commedia dell'arte' lack improvisation?
have my lines just called for love?
questions asked
from above
while i try and keep my balance.
Last edited by pixiesfanyo at Sep 30, 2008,
#2
This is bullshit that you have no replies.

I'll be back. <3
マリ「しあわっせはーあるいってこないだーからあるいってゆっくんだねーん 
いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


"Success is as dangerous as failure. Hope is as hollow as fear." - from Tao Te Ching

#6
This is straight ****ing beautiful bro.

Amazing, absolutely gorgeous.
マリ「しあわっせはーあるいってこないだーからあるいってゆっくんだねーん 
いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


"Success is as dangerous as failure. Hope is as hollow as fear." - from Tao Te Ching

#7
This is truly a work of art.

The abudence of Imagery leaves me puzzled and asking for more.

I really loved the first verse : "You tilt me"

Thats a great line.


Best thing Ive read in a long time. The only thing that turned me off at first was the title . I was thinking " How Epic could this actually be ? Psh...."

Boy was I wrong......
Write it down.
#8
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that is what happens when you stop liking at the drive-in!


Indeed.

This is very good. I think I kind of miss your writing. hm.
#9
i've been reading your pieces lately thinking, "man, he's about to unleash something epic."
how ironic.

this was beautiful.
i hope you get writer of the week.
There's a road that leads to the end of all suffering. You should take it.


- Jericho Caine


secret, aaaaagent maaan.
secret, aaaaagent maaan.
#11
I can't really think of any critisism or advice to give. This was a fantastic piece. The second half of stanza two just floored me. The way you deliver the thoughts is excellent.