#1
Piece I wrote for my band, the song's heavily inspired by Ratm.

Let 'em hang from the gallows,
Gleaming eyes in the darkest of shadows.
With the Mob mentality,
that cause every fata-fu cking-ality.
From the masts watch 'em fall,
So high, not so tall anymore.
Set the fires with the million hoards,
Rape mother nature the whore .

I won't, forget,
The day you said,
I'm not a slave,
I bleed for no one.

There's a man with a gun,
saying he's my only mother's son
No form of freedom ever came from a warbomb,
Doubt the planes were fueled by petrovietnam.
Dope for the fool whose thinking with his fists,
open up the veins deep within the wrist.
Persistin' and resistin' those who insist I desist
A whole barrel full of Justice.

I won't, forget,
The day you said,
I'm not a slave,
I bleed for no one.

Let me know what you think.
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#2
It's good - lots of internal rhyme, lots of political revolution, lots of angst for battle, very Zach de la Rocha, as you said. Maybe too Zach de la Rocha.