#1
This isn't really one of my best songs and i need to write a bridge for it but I like it a lot, So i just was wanting some critiques on it.
Oh and by the way any ideas of what to name it would be appreciated.
Thanks - Austin.


I want to believe,
To believe that you believe in me
Because these things
were not spoken so clearly to me

And How am I to know
What i should do?
Why have you put this on my heart?
Right as I've come through

But You,
You listen when I cry
Out to you
Your name is what i know to call
When i am lost and confused
So brighten my way
and Give me your hope
That this view will change

I want to believe,
That you have a plan for me
Because these beliefs
Are being shaken down

And How am I to know
What i should do?
Why have you put this on my heart?
Right as I've come through

But You,
You listen when I cry
Out to you
Your name is what i know to call
When i am lost and confused
So brighten my way
and Give me your hope
That this view will change
#2
I enjoyed the opening verse. The second stanza the last two lines need to be changed. "Why have you put this on my heart?" is just too long and "Right as I've come through" sounds awkward. And speaking of awkward the line "Your name is what I know to call" could use some tweaking. I also think some imagery would help to enhance this song. Maybe I'm wrong, but it seems that you are addressing God in this piece. There's a whole world of religious imagery at your disposal. " Paper in one hand/ the bible in another/ trying to discover /what these puzzles mean. But these crossword puzzles and crucifixes only spell out four word phrases. " Not the best lines but I hope you get the idea. Anyways I'm looking forward to reading more from you.

Crit mine please
Cup O' Joe