#1
I really need to know if I'm any good or shit tell me

The Silent Lover

chorus:

She runs away at the dead of night
why wont she speak to me
She turns her back when I'm sight
why wont she speak to me
She is so lovely but Ive never hear her voice
Will some body tell me WHY WONT SHE SPEAK TO MEEEE!!!

This is my first attempt can i have some feed back and maybe some intro help.
#6
All of the above, and it is full of incorrect grammar and cliches.
There is some feedback for you.