#1
http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/TenaciousLSD/music/all/play427695

Edit: new link better quality file

it's all me, with vocals, just leave a link to your thread with your crit and i'll leave you a review

here's lyrics

another step through broken glass just
to think of all the things that just won't last and
pray to god you'll have some class while
another walk of life dances past you
say it's over say its new but just don't say its discreet
my back tends to crack underneath all of the weight on your feet
wait around for something that can't be beat
wait arounds just to see your defeat


i'd lie to you
just to see your pretty face fall down
i'd vie for you
just for the chance to see you drown


put down my hand just to lift you up but
rescues are hard hard on top of broken trust
all signs ahead "enlightenment or bust"
wait for skin to reform on these old cuts
say it's better say it's worse but don't say i haven't changed
friendship can triumph even after love has become estranged
my whole life has been rearranged
seems you're the one who hasn't changed


i'd lie to you
just to see your pretty face fall down
i'd vie for you
just for the chance to see you drown

everythings been rearranging
the seasons changing
it brings me to my knees
this experience is so estranging
life is changing me

i'd lie to you
just to see your pretty face fall down
i'd vie for you
just for the chance to see you drowni'd lie to you
just to see your pretty face fall down
i'd vie for you
just for the chance to see you drown
Don't you try and ask me your expiration date
Plans that forgot me 99 times
you'll be the one who opens the gate.

- Cedric Bixler Zavala

Founder of the UG RHPS fanclub....

to join simply amend sig..
Last edited by TenaciousLSD at Oct 2, 2008,
#2
man, the voice is very very low, I can barely hear it, raise its volume in the mix, also I do hear it out of tune many times :S

guitars and drums seems quite ok to me, althought this is not my style of music

nice leads through the last minute of song

get a new singer and make him audible in the mix!!!

3/5

c4c?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=967901
#4
lol yeah i know it's not metal, and i had it mixedf down too high quality so myspace cut the vocals way down... thanks for the crits

Edit: put it on my profile new link in original post, ug way better host for mp3's than myspace
Don't you try and ask me your expiration date
Plans that forgot me 99 times
you'll be the one who opens the gate.

- Cedric Bixler Zavala

Founder of the UG RHPS fanclub....

to join simply amend sig..
Last edited by TenaciousLSD at Oct 2, 2008,
#5
The Guitars are not too bad at al!!
I don't like the vocals. They are not very clear and you should invest in a Pop Filter to sing into, it helps!!

The drums are quite good, but too quite I think.

Good work!


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#6
Even on the UG hosted file, the drums and vocals are really hard to hear. But I did like the vocals, although I found the ryhthm pretty strange in places. The guitars were quite good in most parts, anything I would change would purely be because of my tastes. and I quite like the bass which was at a much better volume than in most bands.

C4C? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=967029
Last edited by Tomo009 at Oct 2, 2008,