#1
Soo, here's my masterpiece, the drums aren't perfect yet, and i'm still looking to replace the second guitar riff with something easier (atm it's too hard for me too play, yes i know, i suck D: ) and/or another easy guitar riff. Only problem is that i have no inspiration, help would be cool

Lol, I fail need to add my 'masterpiece' to my post first eh?
Attachments:
Trashy.zip
Last edited by Keth at Oct 3, 2008,
#2
Where is it?
My Old Progressive Metal Band:
Acrasia
For fans of Between The Buried and Me, Dream Theater, Cynic.

My New Progressive Rock/Djent Band:
Wings Denied
For fans of Deftones, Tesseract, Periphery, Karnivool, Cynic.
#6
Well....

The riff isn't bad, would do better with some sort of intro. I could see vocals over that as a verse. Then use bars 12-16 as a lead into a chorus riff. Now then, move to the chorus riff. It isn't bad... but kinda impossible to play. Maybe if you had written the song in drop D, it would be possible, but face it, you can't switch chord fingerings that rapidly. The notes are good, maybe just make them single notes instead of chords? Then, the...bass solo.... It doesn't fit. Plain and simple. It sounds good, but not where it is. Move it, or lose it. After that, get rid of the bass chords. Basses do not like it when you play chords on them. Or at least, mine doesn't.

I did like the note it ended on though!

All in all, it needs work. Potential is there, but it needs serious work.
Crit mine?
http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=970594
My Old Progressive Metal Band:
Acrasia
For fans of Between The Buried and Me, Dream Theater, Cynic.

My New Progressive Rock/Djent Band:
Wings Denied
For fans of Deftones, Tesseract, Periphery, Karnivool, Cynic.