#1
I wonder why I've never posted here. Oh well. I guess I just post some lyrics I wrote and hope that people will give me some constructive criticism, right?

Anyway, I haven't thought of a real name for this one, but "Chill" is it's working title.

All I wanna do
Is chill all day
But some stupid ****in' shit
Always gets in the way
Gotta do my homework
Take out out the garbage
But nobody understands
That all I wanna do is

Kick back
Chill out
With out losin' my mind
I just wanna go back in time
All the way back to age two or three
But that would be no fun
Without any weed/Because I still wouldn't be free (not sure which to use here)

When I feel so low
I can only get high
But how do I get higher
If I'm in the sky?

Space is a place
I'd like to visit
Too bad for me
It's only on exhibit
I wanna live there
For the rest of my days
And learn how to chill
Ninety-nine different ways

(This next part might end up being the chorus, but I'm not sure)

Sitting here
With my guitar
Wondering how I got this far
Sitting here
With my guitar
Seeing things as what they are

It's a work in progress... I'd really appreciate some feedback.
Daron. The Pit loves you.
daron aka kosmic is now a pit legend
Best post on the pit. Good for you.
thats pretty epic.
So you're like a slower paced Forrest Gump...
Yup...
#2
I don't think your supposed to name your titles like that, mate. It says in the rules what your better off using as a title. Use 'Untitled' if you haven't found a suitable one your happy with yet.

I'll be back in a minute to actually read this...
#3
Oops. Sorry about that. I was looking for the rules, but I just realized they're sort of above where the actual threads are. Sorry again.
Daron. The Pit loves you.
daron aka kosmic is now a pit legend
Best post on the pit. Good for you.
thats pretty epic.
So you're like a slower paced Forrest Gump...
Yup...