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rain keeps the dust at its bay,
the drops fall endlessly,
grey skies are over my eyes,
the sun's gone and so is daylight,

is there anyone out there?
there are footprints around me,
is there anyone out here?
i will follow if you lead,

shadows creep over the land,
a dark sleep is on the horizon,
night fall brings monsters alive,
a world full of secret and lies,

was there anyone out there?
there are footprints around thee,
was there anyone out here?
they will follow if you lead,
can you just get me out of here?
i am cold and so lonely,

they've come
the wicked and shameful
they've come
the sin and disgraceful
they've come

they're here
#2
its a bit hard to tell how good the song if when you cant tell what pitch, rythm and tone ur singing in. try uploading a video of u singing on youtube and post a link?
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#3
Quote by SOADriff
its a bit hard to tell how good the song if when you cant tell what pitch, rythm and tone ur singing in. try uploading a video of u singing on youtube and post a link?

um this is a lyrics forum... to crit lyrics not songs....

Anyway, I find this to be quite good. I think some lines are a bit cliche (i will follow if you lead) but overall I really like the idea. I think the bridge is the best part
I'm here to help

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ok, as usual pit is being very unhelpful except andychalmers, so im gonna go post this someplace else


And a master of storytelling...

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andychalmers102, that story is awesome.